Wednesday 26 June 2019

the Ocean

  The Ocean  
The Ocean looks rough, erratic and insane. Waves crash onto the beach
and people came to ride the waves. People thought it was a great Seascape
and they stayed longer. Under the waves, the coral reef was surrounded
by the colourful little fish swimming happily under the rough erratic waves.      


As I stood at the shore the waves crashed onto me, knocking me off my
feet and drenching me beneath the waves and head first into the sand.
A slight chill shudder through my body. And my wet clothes stick to my
body and me having to pull it off my Soaking wet body.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Liam, Annabelle here from Awahono School. I liked how you used crashing and coral reef. I also liked how your words were lade out. go job !!!

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  2. Hi Liam, it's Hannah from Awahono School. I like your post on the ocean because of all the adjectives you put in there. Next time you could extend yourself and try and write a little bit more. Amazing job once again. From Hannah.

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